Hmm. I see where you’re going with that, but I don’t think I could easily eliminate the second Lilly without either adding the word “she” or rephrasing it to something like:
She turned the key in the lock and pulled the heavy door, opening it wide.
That does save one word, but I really wanted “she turned the key in the lock” to stand on its own, for visual reasons as well as to put a pause in the narrative.
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Date: 2022-04-22 01:27 am (UTC)She turned the key in the lock and pulled the heavy door, opening it wide.
That does save one word, but I really wanted “she turned the key in the lock” to stand on its own, for visual reasons as well as to put a pause in the narrative.
Thanks for the prompt suggestion - it was fun!